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I know that you're broken,
And all your pieces are scattered,
I know that you're bruised,
And your pale skin is battered.

I can see the scars,
That you're trying to hide,
And I can see the hurt,
Burried beneath your pride.

You're barely holding together,
Your tattered, fraying threads,
The harder you try to keep it in,
The more the hole spreads.

Stop trying to battle alone,
When I'm here with sword in hand,
I can help you pick up the pieces,
There'll be nothing we can't withstand.

Don't give up the fight,
My friend who is so fragile,
Take my hand and let me hold you,
Let me love you for a while.

You think that it's not worth it,
And just want to give in,
So you run the blade down your arm,
Breaking your heavenly skin.

I wish that I could show you,
How much you mean to me,
But you just push me away,
And wallow in your debris.

Why can't you see what I see?
I think that you're amazing,
I love your scars, and your wounds,
And your eyes that are always blazing.

I am giving you my all,
So don't leave me alone,
I'm begging you to fight for me,
Follow me into the unknown.

Don't give up the fight,
My friend who is so fragile,
Take my hand and let me hold you,
Let me love you for a while.

Written by Liezyl Steyn
This is written to all those people who think that they have nothing to live for...just remember, that love is always worth living for :heart:
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Hello, *VonDiezyl.

The description of this poem really fits. It is really for the people who don't have hope but they don't realize there is, and they can't just find it. The reader encourages his/her friend to realize there is still hope in his/her friend's problem.

The reader encourages him/her not to commit suicide as it just breaks his/her life. Even if he/she looks fragile and must be carried with care, he/she shall not break because of his/her weakness.

The poem has a very sad emotion while the reader tells his/her friend not to take his/her life because of a very bad problem and the more he/she hides the more he/she will have greater chances.

As what the poem says, it is not right to leave friends when they say they are depressed and want to commit suicide.

I hope you have another poem and I hope it will be in a good quality.
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This piece is so moving and captivating! The standard every other rhyme is very effective, and the words choice is phenominal. I also love the fact that you rpeated third verse as the last one, it concluded the peom very well. This is one of those poems that can be a long one, becasue it proficiently flows along. I also like the fact that you added no suurounding adjectives, so the reader can imagine whatever they feel is appropiate. It also conects to many people, even those who think they fall under this catagory are moved. I know I am loved, yet I was still touched by your words. A very well-written verse. Keep it up.
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Deviantinterested Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014   General Artist
Very nicely and delicately written.
I feel the pang of emotions for wanting so much to reach out, even though the stretching hurts being pushed further and further away, but still the love is there to give anyway.
beautiful piece. :hug:
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VonDiezyl Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow thank you so so much <33
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Deviantinterested Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014   General Artist
:-) Is a good piece. ;-) :hug:
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VonDiezyl Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'm glad you think so :3
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eastan11 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Waaaah! This brought tears to my eyes! Very nicely done!!
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VonDiezyl Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Aww thank you ♡
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eastan11 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Don't metion it! Hug 
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Poptartjam Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You have no idea how much this fits my girlfriend o-o I'm going to show her this sometime. And very good job on it!
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VonDiezyl Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thank you so much! p.s can I note you? It's urgent
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Poptartjam Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Of course! And, go ahead. You don't have to ask me
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